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Terod Naej's avatar

I remember walking into the chaos wearing white t-shirt… and returning home stained brown. The air was thick with smoke, burning tires writing their story on our skin. This is not something you imagine. You carry it. There’s a difference between writing about chaos and having lived inside it… and this feels like the latter. Respect for the truth you put on the page.

Odel Asseille's avatar

Thank you,

The prompt sent me back home Haiti, between 2010-1015.

Your lines are amazing. We don’t walk into the chaos and went out untouched

The stranger's avatar

Hauntingly beautiful... that's definitely my vibe 🔥 funny how my response to the prompt was very similar lol

Odel Asseille's avatar

Thank you Stranger 🤗

That’s why I like to believe we, human, are more alike than we want to admit it

The stranger's avatar

Youre welcome Odel

We are differently similar

And similaly different

We are just chaotic 😂

Odel Asseille's avatar

Year we are uniquely common

yet commonly unique

The stranger's avatar

You speak my language 😂❤️‍🔥

Odel Asseille's avatar

I kinda like to use that language in poetry too 🥰

The stranger's avatar

Same!

Let me DM you in abit, i will show you some examples

And you show me some too

I do this ALOT!

Gary L Taylor's avatar

Beautifully written, with a power that hits hard and stays there when it lands.

Odel Asseille's avatar

Thank you, Gary

Aaliya's avatar

Hauntingly beautiful my friend ❤️‍🩹

Odel Asseille's avatar

Thank you, dearest ✨

Dipti  Vyas's avatar

This lands hard, like walking through fire with lungs open, letting the smoke fill every corner of memory.

You don’t just show the chaos; you inhabit it: the smell, the heat, the weight of despair pressing against the chest. It reads less like description and more like a lived interior.

What strikes me most is the steady pulse beneath the havoc, the heart that beats to revolution, not as ideology, but as survival, as inheritance, as something elemental.

It’s brutal, yes, but also intimate. It reminds that fire isn’t only destruction; it’s a mirror to what persists, what refuses to be erased.

Odel Asseille's avatar

Thanks for your deep comment.

This prompt sent me straight back to my country. And I take a pleasure to writing. I’m glad it strikes you a little ✨

AsukaHotaru's avatar

Black smoke from burning rubber rising off the ground, that line came in hot and ugly and way too vivid..!

Odel Asseille's avatar

Asukaaaaaa 😊✨ thank you 😊

There’s beauty in the ugliness, right ?

Alicia's avatar

Very vivid and haunting imagery and emotional impact. Scorching.

Odel Asseille's avatar

Thank you, Alicia ✨

Nabanita's avatar

Powerful! Fear can’t get you. Loved it.

Odel Asseille's avatar

Thank you Nabanita

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Mar 22
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Odel Asseille's avatar

Thank you,

I’m from Haiti.

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Odel Asseille's avatar

Sure, please do